Eternal Darkness

J. Sander over at ‘Don’t Delete Me’ shared a sentence starter for his Writing Prompt Wednesday. I couldn’t resist a quick detour, since an image sprang into my head and I had to go with it. I must warn you though, this is darker than anything I’ve ever written, so I apologise in advance at its disturbing nature!

Eternal Darkness

The knife he chose was his Mothers’ favourite. Ironic really, since he was going to end her life with it. He was done with the nagging, the whining, and the endless chatter about how much better her life would be without him. Christ, she was a pain in his ass. Her bitterness was like a disease; the only thing she was willing to share with him.

He would look into those hateful, pale blue eyes and watch the lights go out. Only then would he be free He doubted she would go to a better place. No, it was more likely she would bathe in hell’s eternal fire. Not that his life was any better.

The knife felt heavy in his hand, like he was channeling his hatred into it. He was surprised it didn’t burn a hole in his palm.

As he approached her room, a bead of sweat dripped off his brow and landed with a plop on the hard wooden floor. That was odd, wasn’t it? Come to think of it, all of his senses were off, or maybe on. It was dark in the hall yet he could see with a clarity he’d never experienced.

He took a huge lungful of air, wondering at the putrid odour which seared his lungs and made him think of his own despair. It was death. He was sure of it. But he hadn’t even killed her yet.

That was when he knew, he’d been here before, in the exact same spot. And what came next, was the stuff of his nightmares.

On cue his mother’s door flew open. Her eye sockets were caverns of blood and scar tissue and yet she looked directly into his soul. Her mouth was open, as if in a silent scream and her nostrils flared when she sensed him.

β€œMy boy,” she said, in a singsong voice that peeled the flesh from his bones. β€œIt’s time to play.”

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Thanks for reading

Mel

10 responses to “Eternal Darkness”

  1. haileyfoglio Avatar
    haileyfoglio

    Terrifying.

    1. mbarkersimpson Avatar

      Thanks! I have no idea what came over me. I’m currently looking at pictures of fluffy kittens! πŸ™‚ I appreciate the comment.

  2. J. Sander Avatar

    I am glad I brought the darkness out in you. Even though that makes me sound like Satan.

    Loved your story!!

    1. mbarkersimpson Avatar

      Thank you πŸ™‚ I enjoyed exploring the dark side, so I appreciate the opportunity to spread my wings!

  3. callummclaughlin Avatar

    Truly chilling! Perhaps this is an area of your writing that could be explored further, I’d love to see what else you could muster up if you can get something this powerful already from a genre you are not yet fully accustomed to πŸ™‚

    1. mbarkersimpson Avatar

      Thanks, Callum. I’m wondering if I should be disturbed by how easily the scene came to me! Seriously though, I’m pleased that I didn’t feel compelled to give the characters an out πŸ™‚ Thanks for the comment.

  4. Harliqueen Avatar

    Blimey! What an intense and gripping short piece. It had me chilled. Very well done though πŸ˜€

    1. mbarkersimpson Avatar

      Thanks, Mishka. It always makes me smile when I get a ‘Blimey’ out of you! Thanks for commenting πŸ™‚

  5. Cassie Avatar

    Great piece! I’m not a horror fan as a reader admittedly, however it was chilling, thrilling and interesting 😊.

    1. mbarkersimpson Avatar

      Thanks, Cassie. I appreciate the lovely comments. Sometimes a story takes you in an unexpected direction and it was actually great fun to write!

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